Monday, October 13, 2008

Extended Metaphor Love Poem(Revision:Playing w/ poetry)

ORIGINAL DRAFT:

Love is never having to say it to that special individual because they already know it



It is like apparent weightlessness, you can not physically see it,it is not tangible



But you know its there and it still effects you in all the most positive ways possible



You emotionally float, you may possible rejoice in the form of song, whatever you may do you celebrate it



Its not a silly little moment,its a long lasting experience, a feeling that can not be explained through the most intellectual of people



When you experience it you feel like your on top of a mountain range but when you lose it you are as low as death valley

Whatever this thing called love is, it should be experienced by all everywhere

REVISION:

It is never having to say it, it is weightlessness, even though it is not tangible you know its there

Effecting you in all the most positive ways possible; you emotionally float and may even rejoice in the form of song

Whatever you may do you celebrate it because it is not a silly little moment its a long lasting experience

A feeling that can not be explained through the most intellectual of people only through the individuals actions and outer glow

They are the waves that move theocean and cause electricity that one feels when near that special someone

When you experience it, no organic or man made drug can intoxicate you more, but when you lose it you are low as death valley

No matter how long ago you may have experienced it and no mater how long it last, you won't want to come home without it

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